Camera is an useful tool for our daily life. It helps us to memory the happy or unhappy things. Camera can also take a picture to help us to understand what the things happened in our daily life. However, are these pictures showing the truth? Although the girls in the pictures are slender, is she really having a slender figure in real condition? The person looks happy in the pictures may be not happy in the real life. We look many pictures on TV or Internet every day, and the pictures also look nice. We still need to think these pictures again or read more information about them. We couldn’t make a decision from the pictures only. The details or background happened behind the picture is necessarily for us to realize the picture. “The camera never lies” let us feel that we seem to know everything on the picture, but we don’t really know the “truth” behind it.
Hi 丹尼爾,
回覆刪除I really like this article. It's a good piece! I'm impressed that 你把這篇文章跟真實生活中的想法做連結 (雖然是我逼你的)，而且連得不錯，journal或作文都該這樣寫才有算有想法的文章，那文章的聲音讀者才會喜歡
And the following are some mistakes of which I hope you to make a revision.
1. Camera is an useful tool for our daily life.
第一、camera可數
第二、不用an
2. It helps us to memory the happy or unhappy things.
第一、用remember不是memory
第二、這裏不可用定冠詞the
3. Camera can also take a picture to help us to understand what the things happened in our daily life.
第一、這裏不可用定冠詞the
第二、understand在文意上不適合這裏，請改掉
4. However, are these pictures showing the truth? Although the girls in the pictures are slender, is she really having a slender figure in real condition?
第一、代名詞she有問題
第二、人沒有"正在有"某種身材的說法，請用簡單式
5. The person looks happy in the pictures may be not happy in the real life.
請修改may be not的位置
6. We look many pictures on TV or Internet every day, and the pictures also look nice.
用see取代look, 請用the Internet
7 We still need to think these pictures again or read more information about them.
第一、think少了介系詞
8. We couldn’t make a decision from the pictures only.
couldn't用can't
9. The details or background happened behind the picture is necessarily for us to realize the picture.
be動詞用錯、necessarily詞性部隊
10.“The camera never lies” let us feel that we seem to know everything on the picture, but we don’t really know the “truth” behind it.
加上一個ending thought會比較好
Hi Daniel,
回覆刪除I think you might be interested in this English native speaker's answer to the grammar questions about 'a number of/the number of; the committee". This girl's answer is slightly different from the grammar book you showed me last Friday. Check it out:
http://lang-8.com/36133/journals/473025/Toughest-grammar-questions-EVER!!!